Statutory Warning: This is my first attempt to write a story.. Read at your own risk!
So you are ready to take risk. It might be difficult task but make sure you read the story till the end..
After placing an order for a bouquet, I was waiting outside the shop reading a magazine featuring an interview with a celebrity, who was popular for his much-publicized love affair that ended just a while ago than his acting. When asked about his love, he had to say this ~
"My love is true! Right now we may stand apart, but every mind has a theater and you can never prevent flashbacks from occurring in them". My mind has already started to travel back with a supersonic speed giving space shuttle 'Atlantis' a complex....................
Its Deepika's mobile which is ringing loudly waking all the ppl in the floor including me... She picked the call and the person on the other end ~ "Good Day Mam! I am Priyanka calling from Pizza Hut, we are pleased to inform you that you have won a ticket for sivaji this weekend, through our lucky draw contest. Ticket has already been couried to your address, you would be receiving them soon.. "
Deepika outcried, "Oh.. MY GOD! I can't believe it, I gonna watch the movie the day it is getting released.. anyhow thanks a lot.. ". She hung the phone..
I was making a call, admiring the way she was blazoning out to her friends near by. Person at the other-end picked up and I said "Thanks Priyanka!"
Next day at the personal courier collection/dispatch desk in my office:
"How many days do you generally take to deliver a courier? "
"Depends on the location sir! For International we would generally take a week, for any-places within the country would take a max of two days. Utmost a day for local couriers..", explained the courier person
"That's cool! so how much time do you think it would take to dispatch the courier from your desk to the cubicle out there? ". I asked him pointing out Deepika's cubicle.
"A minute.. ", he replied with a boasting smile..
"Then just do it right away.. ", I handed over the cover, which has the tickets for the show. Of course it befuddled the courier guy.. I moved my feet without wasting any-more moment..
Come Saturday Morning...
Maybe the first day in my life I was washing my face before my Dad baths me in my bed..
I entered into the theater after making sure Deepika's scooty marked its presence into multiplex. She located her seat and was about to take them she noticed me sitting beside her..
"Hey, what a surprise! What are you doing here?", she posted a stupid question...
"Hmmm.. Dancing.. ". I know that was bad reply, but She giggled for almost a minute.
She started boasting.. "You know I won this ticket through lucky draw.. ".
"Really!!" I exclaimed, "Only I knew how many hours I stood in a queue to get your tickets.. " I told to myself..
Flim intermission and some slow moving scenes were the only time I enjoyed during the movie.. That night, I threw a party and shared my happiness with my friends, as always they urged me to propose her soon..
"Your bouquet is ready!", shopkeeper's voice paused my flashback..
While collecting the bouquet, a scooty crossing me caught my attention. I did take effort to stop it, but for sure she won't be able to hear my shout in the midst of the heavy traffic. I placed the bouquet in my bag and started my bike but by that time she has gone out of sight. What's real use with a high CC bikes when I wasn't able to catch a scooty?..
Adrenaline was rushing and I had butterflies in my stomach.. It was sweating already. My hands was trembling. Even at signals I used to rise the accelerator to reduce my tension, but in otiose. At a signal, I finally found the scooty at the other side of the road, I tried to reach her, only to get scolding from people behind me. She flew again.. After all the efforts I overtook her bike and stopped her! It took me seconds to bring my heart down from throat..
I parked my bike in the side lane, walked towards her, took a deep breath and said .. "Can you please tie your shawl behind you, it was sweeping the road and it may get stuck in your wheels"..
She faked a plastic smile tied them out and said "Thanks!". Not less than a moment she flew away..
I took my bouquet and walked towards the cemetery.. I placed the bouquet on the grave which had Deepika's name engraved on it, "If someone could have warned Deepika like that, she would not be sleeping here". Rain took care of wiping my tears away...
DISCLAIMER: Climax of this story was based on in Kumudham (Weekly Tamil Magazine). Don't have any references to that.
Keywords:love, love story, short, short stories, stories, story
Sunday, June 24, 2007
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14 comments:
Machi unakku ennamo ayidichu da!!! I was jus kidding man.. The story is real good.. keep wotkin on it.. This is how writer's are born. They call it "Kanni muyarchi".
Machi cool. kanni muyarchi thodarattum
Good one...
கலக்குற டா. நெறையா எழுது. கதை நல்லா இருந்துது.
Good One!
Bt, this being ur first Story, u could have avoided this sad ending!
Fantastic imagination. Thoughtful usage of words. Nice plot. Pravin will curse me for saying this, but the bike chasing scooty surely reminds me of Dhanush in Thiruda thirudi. What a coincidence !!
Good work buddy... U r confirmed as story writer for 'MY' film... Donno when I will start the movie.. :-)
If I were to give title to this story then I will give
"JOLLUNNU ORU KAADHAL KADHAI"
Starring PRAVIN with Starrrrrring KOVAI SARALAAA
மாப்ள ... கதை நல்லா இருக்கு .. நல்ல மொழி பெயர்ப்பு ;) ....
அதைவிட .. நீ படித்த கதையின் பிரதிபலிப்புன்னு வெளிப்படையா சொன்னது தான் ரொம்ப அருமை. முடிந்தால் அந்த கதையின் ஆசிரியர் பெயரையும் சொல்லி மொழிபெயற்புனு முதல்ல சொல்லிவிடுவது நன்று;)
வாழ்த்துக்கள்.. தொடரட்டும் உன் கதை ;)
wonderful story bro...(almost made me shed a tear after 3 yrs...) all i would say is that u should write more..;)
A very nice story..a touching one too..I really liked the way u had written it..I didn't feel like a first time story from you..
I would like u to continue writing..I wish u all the best..and if u find time then read mine too and let me know ur comments on the same.
You can find my stories at community Short Stories n Poems, http://www.orkut.com/Community.aspx?cmm=34340909
Nice touching story man. Another 7/G Rainbow colony..?? ;-)
Imran
Ippo enna than solla vareenga ?
Great story. Beautifully expressed.
Keep on writing more. Would love to read more of it.
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